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Unread Mar 10th, 2004, 03:40 PM   #1
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I've been worki'n on this a while. I'm quite happy with it... except something is wrong. I don't like the eyes. A little constructive criticism would be nice.

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Unread Mar 10th, 2004, 04:06 PM   #2
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The eyes are great! His legs are really short though, I think..I dont know *L*
His mane should be more brownish/red too. Other than that, I think it looks really great
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Unread Mar 10th, 2004, 04:13 PM   #3
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I tried to use the same color shceme as in the nightime scene before, "he lives in you". And the legs are a lil too short huh? *Tries to decide how I'd go about changi'n this* Maybe I should just cover them up with grass!
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He needs a tad more of a tush! But thats all I can think of. Your coloring is menacing to me, wish I could do that good.
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He needs a tad more of a tush!

You mean, make his rear a little wider?
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Uh, yeah, for the most part, he needs a bit more body to him. But thats only if you want it to look more like the movie art. Otherwise, you have a cute darivitive right here!
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Okay, thanks!
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You said you don't like the eyes? The only thing I see is that the right one is a little larger for the 3/4 view you have going on. And I think it's like, a quarter of a centimeter too high or something.

Other than that, it really looks great. ^^ I see how the legs are a little too short, but that just seems to be more your style than an anatomical mistake.

It's a terribly cute picture, you have an adorable style.
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His head is a little big. Try drawing the mane after the body, it helps a lot. The two lines for the nose thing (what is it called? bridge? the top of the muzzle) tend to go straight parallel, or flare out.

Also, you might want to shade the mane a bit more. Compared to the rest of him, it looks kind of flat.

I really like this though! your art is good. did you get a tablet?
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No tablet, free hand. *Pets my mouse*

And thanks for the addvice!
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You mean you were able to do those smooth lines on your comp? WITH YOUR MOUSE ALONE!?
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Heh, um... yeah.
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His tail seems a little long. But I always have trouble with tail length so I'm not one to talk.. Other than what others mentioned I've got nothing.

Hehe.. he looks like he needs a good squeeze. *Squeezes* n___n
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Unread Mar 11th, 2004, 10:05 AM   #14
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His face is a lot more in shadow than the rest of him. Also, I'd give the shadow a bit of a blueish tint, makes for a more interesting shadow than just grey. Other than that, he's a huge huggable lug and I want to take him home! Wonderful color choices all around.
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