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Unread Mar 4th, 2002, 03:22 PM   #1
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This is Stan...

Please you guys! Tell me what'cha think about my new fan fiction "This is Stan" it based around Eminem's song "Stan" and it explains why Stan is so obsessed with Eminem and what drives him to...well drive off a bridge... It's not compleatly done but I got 3 pretty long chapters done... INCLUDES DIRTY WORDS AND EMINEM LYRICS so just a warning...

http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=638139

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Unread Mar 9th, 2002, 12:44 AM   #2
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oh that´s very nice¡¡ not too violent for me and stan´s reactions are too mature for a 15 year old guy, he should be like criying and shouting to his mum, well maybe u have to work on the reactions of the chars, and hesitate more about what they feel. The narration is very clear and I think u describe the most important things and that is good because it giver ritme to the narration. But anyway I liked not too original but interesting.
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Unread Mar 9th, 2002, 10:54 AM   #3
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Well I kinda wanted to show that Stan was mature, and that he put up with so much. I wanted him to be just like Eminem was when he was little...that way when he hears the music, he can relate and become obbsesed...

mm, kay..


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Unread Mar 9th, 2002, 11:00 AM   #4
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but I think that a grown up person who blames a singer that he doesn´t even know for his crime tis not very mature
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