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Unread Mar 11th, 2002, 12:56 AM   #1
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Hmm, well, I'd love to get opinions!

Well, well, as most of you know I'm not very good in drawing humans, but still I do my best & always try to get a bit better in them! So, yeah, just thought I may post a lil' picy here & ask for your honest opinion on it!
What'd bad, what's good, what should I change, what should I keep?! I'd love getting some opinions!
So, here's my char, Marley!
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Unread Mar 11th, 2002, 07:42 AM   #2
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Well..most of it is brilliant, Wolvy!! The face and the proportions are perfect as far as I can see!! Well done!!


There are just a couple of little things that mabye need to be fixed..I'm no expert in drawing humans so I might be wrong..*L*...his shoulders are just a little too high..and the faraway shoulder, you can't really see it, the one nearest to us is a bit too rounded..I've drawn below how they could sit. Also his legs, the are just a tad too thin and the bent one is just a bit out of shape, you also need to widen the calf/shin part of the leg a bit.

Hope that helps..I've drawn a little diagram as I said..but your humans have really improved!! *hug*
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Unread Mar 11th, 2002, 08:06 AM   #3
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I'm no expert, and your humans rock, there's just two things I've noticed inall your human drawings-

1. The forehead isn't large enough. The hairline starts right abouve the eyes in the pic, in RL, the eyes are in the middle of the head.
2. The ears are slightly too high. They should be about in line with the eyes.

Other than that and what Sita said, it's wonderful I need to work on my humans too...
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Unread Mar 11th, 2002, 08:10 AM   #4
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Ehhh! Thankies a bunch, Sita! *huggles & snuggles*
Yeah, I know, I kinda get the bodies to be, well, rubber-like! Sometimes too round & stuff, like they'd have no bones! *lol* Poor people! Now I'm finally able to draw faces but always mess with the bodies! *arg* :p
Anyways, thankies a bunch for the help & /of course/ for the great diagram! It's really just more then helpfull, girl! *nods heavilly* Just hope I'll be able to get some of it in my art & stopp the rubber-bones!
I totally see what's wrong now, the shoulders're much too round & acctually he really hasn't one on one side! :p . . . & the legs kinda look like having no knees don't they?! :lol
Wow, you really know how to draw a human body, girl! He looks so much better after your changes! Hmmm, guess I'll now go & try it out again! Thankies SO much, Sita! *huggles & snuggles her buddy*
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Unread Mar 11th, 2002, 08:11 AM   #5
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Maybe this will clarify better-

Oops! Diddn't see ya reply.
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Unread Mar 11th, 2002, 08:12 AM   #6
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Woops, didn't see Pegs replay, coming!
Yeah, you're right! These 2're my worst mistakes, the eyes kinda seem tobe stuck on the forhead or something & the ear also're lot too high! *arg* I'm already working on it hardly, hope to get it all fixed soon!
Thankies a bunch to you as well, Pegs . . . & for the great picy! Now I /see/ what's wrong! I always thought it, but never really saw it! Thanks a bunch, girl! *clings & hugs*
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Unread Mar 11th, 2002, 08:26 AM   #7
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Glad I could help, gal!! *hugback*

You are really improving though with every pic..and mine are far from perfect..but you did a really good job on your pic!! I always draw the heads out of proportion with the bodies..*L*
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Unread Mar 11th, 2002, 09:02 AM   #8
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Ohh everyone beat me to the punch on the anatomy part. (excellent work on the overdraw Sita btw!)

But Wolvy I just wanted to tell you that you have a great overall human there. Like natural looking pose and expression. I think your hands could stand to be a touch larger but the hands themselves are wuite nice.

Very good work.
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Ehhh, thankies a bunch for the big compliment again, Sita! *hugs* But you're also always getting better with every pic you do, honestly! . . . & your human picys really rock! Love the one of Ford & Zaphod riding thos animal-thingies you did!
Yeah, Sita really did a great job in the overdrawing! It's really more then helpful! *nods heavilly*
Wheee, thankies for the nice words EN! *blushes* I tried hard to get better on the expressions, poses & stuff! Took me ages since I was able to draw a acceptable hand *lol* They're really hard to do, but yeah, he kinda got girl-hands, hasn't he?! *g*
Thanks a bunch to you as well! *hugs*

OK, I'll do another pic tomorrow, using all the great tips you gave me & then I'll also post it in here!
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Unread Mar 11th, 2002, 11:35 AM   #10
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*blushes* Thanks EN!

And again..it was no problem!! I'm glad I helped!! *hug*
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