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Unread Mar 8th, 2002, 04:39 PM   #1
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Do I have what it takes?

To be a songwriter?

This one's uh, well its semi-deep..*L*...not as deep as "The Bitter One"..NONE of you are reading that... :( Its kinda..VERY personal..o.o

Phoenix- Cally Highfield

The pendulum always swings twice before I fall,
the clock always ticks before it comes to call.
Taps me on the back, stabs me in the back-
but I'm just used to it all.

I speak my mind but I can't find-
The meaning of "right" and "wrong".
Haplessly I run, and I can't hide-
and then I hear the sound of the gong-
Chiming out my sentence,
chiming out my life,
Holding pen in hand, writing my book of strife...

Phoenix, phoenix...that is all I am,
you can toss me in the firey flames and I'll still come out again...
Phoenix, phoenix...it's what I've come to be,
you can bolt the doors and start the wars but I'll still come out as me.

The people come knocking a torch in each hand,
they cut me with their razors then into the wounds they throw sand.
They look at me and they laugh and walk off into the day,
carbon copies just the same in appearance and every other way.

Burn, baby burn...flamer's inferno...
burn, baby burn...burn all through the night...
burn, baby burn...phoenix's new life...
burn, baby burn...burn with all your might!
(continues in background as-)
Phoenix, phoenix...that is all I am,
you can toss me in the firey flames and I'll still come out again...
Phoenix, phoenix...it's what I've come to be,
you can bolt the doors and start the wars but I'll still come out as me.

Phoenix...fly away...fly, fly..fly away..today...make an escape..fly, fly away..today...fly, fly..

Help would be appreciated, if needed
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Unread Mar 8th, 2002, 08:29 PM   #2
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I think so, at least. You'd have to get just the right people to perform it with the right instruments. There are many ways to do it, although I think it would be pretty with acoustic guitars, or if it was alternative sounding.

The only thing that I would critique is the "burn, baby, burn" part. Maybe it should just all be in the background, I dunno...it just seems kinda repetitive. Heh, I have no idea what I'm talking about...but that's what I think, at least.

Very nice! I would submit this or find someone to perform it and record it .

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Unread Mar 9th, 2002, 05:04 AM   #3
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I didn't make that clear :/ It is in the background *hehe* =)

Thank you VERY much for the comments...I mean, its not my best song at all- I just chose one at random *L*
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:: "cally-cat: must be felt to be believed!".../ i find certain things addictive... like pretty drugs ::
The Padded Cell.
Marc- *being hugged by Waif..* .. argh! Ow! Ow! You're squashing.. my.. appendix.."
Waif-...o.o...didn't you have that removed?
Marc- *glares* I'd like to have YOU removed...!

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IIIiiif you've never seen an elephant ski, then you've never been on acid!
~Eddie Izzard~
Borge- You're so "Qu'est Que C'est"..!
Marilyn- More like "what is it?"...
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Unread Mar 13th, 2002, 12:35 PM   #4
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Cally, that is just beautiful!.. I sorta imagine it in my head as only singing voice and acoustic guitar.. but that's my opinion o.O

Pretty!
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